Character Help For Me and My Sake_Angela

So I wanna keep my characters straight. That is an important think to know when writing a story right? Yeah, that's what I thought.

So Angela. At in the first draft, she was the heroine of the story. She was smart, beautiful, athletic, a good flirt. . . She was the girl on campus. But she was humble about it. She practically didn't notice all the other guys practically falling at her feet, that is unless she thought they were something to look at and wanted to date them.  She was the girl. The one that every other girl wanted to be. She didn't have any real faults. . . which is my problem.

Now, she has become too motherly. She wants to look out for everyone, but because she only has so many hours in the day she constantly is getting after Cindy and Jessica. She is rather bossy, blunt, and can be very unkind to Jessica and blatantly rude to Cindy--Cindy can't do anything about it because she doesn't know she's being made fun of and has left home to go to college back East. Jessica now gets the full force of it all and hates it. However, when it comes to her friends, Angela is almost an angel. She is always up for giving rides, going out, hanging out, but she wants to be the one in control of the situation. She doesn't like things to surprise her and when they do--because no one can truly control all of their life--she had a melt down. Everything that she did have control over now evaporates in her mind and then because she can't get a hold of herself, things just become worse.
            Now, there is a reason why this happens. Her dad, brother, and younger sister were in an accident about a decade before the story starts. Tony was only seven or eight and Jessica was about four, so she doesn't remember this happening. It was a bad accident and totaled the car--Angela's favorite car at the time--sending Tony through one of the windows, because he was playing with Jessica and wasn't sitting right in his seat. He was life-flighted to the closest hospital where he stayed for almost two weeks under careful watch--his head was hit when he landed on a rock outside of the car; the doctors concluded that there was no major damage done but kept him just to be sure and to watch the rest of his injuries which weren't extensive. Angela watched over her brother for as long as her parents would let her--they called it the "twin connection" when really all it was was a need to make sure he, her best friend, was alright. She became very watchful after that until it slowly morphed into being more motherly than normal; then her teenage side kicked in and she became mean about it.
          Angela is a very pretty girl, though not drop dead gorgeous as she had been in the first draft. She's on the shorter side of average with fiery, red hair that is extremely curly, her face is still sprinkled with freckles over her button-y nose and gentle cheek bones. Her eyes are also a light caramel brown, almost honey colored. As every teenager, there is still a bit of baby fat still in her cheeks. She hates it, but at least the rest of her baby fat has left her. Now she has a good figure. Her biggest characteristic is her mouth, she loves to talk. In the middle of class especially. Her grades aren't the best because she'd rather be on the phone or Skpe then doing her homework, but she gets fairly decent grades on her tests so her parents don't complain much.
          She is also a gymnast. Her height is a bit of an issue because she is just tall enough to be a nusense with her activities. She's grown a few inches in the last few years that has caused her some alarm; if she grows too tall it hurts her ability to compete.
         Her Ability is a powerful one. She has the ability to move things with her mind, like Jean Grey in a away. How powerful she, herself, can become is up to her. She can be a rather flighty person when it comes to thinks for herself, and so in disciplining herself to make her Ability powerful is a bit of a challenge. That is until Gabriel tells her that she could use it to defend herself, friends, and children later (at this point she may be on the verge of getting married or having her twin boys, Daniel and Ryan?). After being told that, she really buckles down and gets her head in the game.
        Angela and Gabriel have been friends since Angela and Tony were born. Lady Hannah, Gabriel's mother, and Alice Purling. . . I don't remember her name. . . have been friends since they were young girls on Trael (subject to change.). So when Alice had her twins Lady Hannah had to be there and brought her two children, at the time, with her. Gabriel and Angela hit it off first thing. Although he wasn't around much, because he lived on a different planet, they didn't get to see each other very often. But when he did show up, he was ever the gentleman and--although seemed rather odd at times (like not understanding how the TV worked and why they drove cars instead of horses and carriages)--they were always good friends.
        The last time Gabriel visited them had been about two years before (right before he got his Knighthood and went off to war). His visit lasted a two weeks, in which Angela had grown a major crush on him. She tried not to let it show, but Gabriel already knew about it and he was okay with it. Nothing was pursued except for one date. It left her happy but a little unsatisfied. Had it really taken him that long to figure out that she was into him? But no, he didn't want to get too into something, especially with such a close friend, if he might not come back. War was a messy business.

So there is Angela, a very quick rundown of her.

After reading something new. . .

So after reading some of Jane Austen's books and discussing them in my class, I've noticed that I'm "recycling" characters and situations. SO, I've had a breakthrough in one of my problems. I know Victoria didn't like Angela at all through Jessica's point of view and it was hard to change from Jesse's POV to get back into Angela's. It was the weirdest thing. But, Angela has been revisited in my mind and--although she was sad and felt neglected and felt treated as if she was the bad guy when she very much isn't--has got her spunk back.

I knew I was missing something from Angela even when I was writing the first draft. She was heroic and happy and charming. . . However, she was missing something called a major flaw. Everyone has them, but I couldn't figure out what her's was. As I wrote Jesse's POV, I found that she was far too motherly. Jesse already had a mom, she didn't need another one. Even after their mom died in Jesse's first draft, Angela was trying to fill that role--which there was now space to fill, Angela  felt she was doing the right thing. But even that didn't feel right.

Things have changed. I'm writing it here because I feel no one really ever looks here anymore--it's not like I update things all that often and it's really just been for myself--and it is here because it needs to be written down somewhere and I'd loose it if I actually wrote it down on paper.

Changes:

• Angela's mom doesn't die yet. It won't be until much later that she does die(I really need to remember their mom's name... I think it's Lilly. . .But I could be wrong.)
• Jesse and her mom DO get in a car accedent and Airo DOES pick her up after she runs away. Tobias gets in her head and tells her that her mom is dead and that it's all her fault--even though it was the other drivers fault, he was going around the corner too fast in the dark and wasn't paying attention to the road as he changed the CD's in his truck. He tells her she's a horrible person and she should just kill herself. . .or something liket that. probably not kill herself, but she starts thinking suicide--like Cutting Curtis--is a good thing. She starts cutting while she's with Airo.
• OOOOHHH!!! I so the reason why Jessica looks all punk and has her hair dyed all sorts of funky colors is because of the night her mom died. Her mom was on her way to pick Jessica up from some club down the interstate or something that Cole and his band were at (the whole freezing cop thng where they see Greg--not the deer--and she gets saved by Airo there (that's why she gets in his car after the accident)). Her best girl-friend at this point--not the best of people to be hanging around with--pulls her aside before they get there and gives her a complete make over. She stops just short of practically giving her a tattoo. . . Maybe she gives her another ear-piercing. . . ?  IDK but she goes all out practically.

As for anything else at the moment, I don't really know. I've been stuck at the beginning and I need the beginning to be good so then I don't have to do a complete rewrite, like I'm curently doing right now. *rolls eyes* It's insanely obnoxious. But I like this part right now.

At least this part seems to flow better. (Not to mention I still get to keep kicking Greg's butt over and over and over and over again. It's kind of awesome!!)